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Post by SirenSong on Wed Dec 19, 2018 8:35 pm

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General Information

Name: Marin (Marina) Eldoris
Alias: Siren
Age:18
Gender/Sex: Male/ male (trap)
Sexuality:Bisexual
Height: 5’5
Weight: 120 ibs


Behavioral Information

Alignment:Good, lawful, neutral

Personality: Marin is somewhat strange in his actions. He’s easiest to describe as a diva, spoiled and somewhat bratty at times, putting up a fuss whenever he doesn’t seem to get his way, as well as often acting superior to those around him. In actuality he’s quite insecure and will try to maintain people’s attention as long as he can if he has it. He tends to be a bit flighty, developing crushes or romantic feelings quickly before crushing them by imposing his rather high standards onto the other person. Only to raise those standards if they actually meet them. One might be correct in saying he has a fear of a committed relationship, and this would actually be correct as he has issues with the idea of love. Believing any affection, he receives to be due to his power, and therefore not actually genuine.

Likes: Singing, dancing, wearing cute clothes, being the center of attention, luxury, his fans, sweet things.

Dislikes: Relationships, fish, his power, spicy foods, germs, being ignored.

Background
Marin from a young age has always had a somewhat feminine appearance, and early in his childhood had been regularly picked on over it. It wasn’t until moving school he’d realized he himself didn’t mind, and even embraced his own appearance to an extent when he began to wear girl’s clothes. This along with his already feminine appearance, made people close to him begin to think of him more as a girl, even close family friends that knew otherwise. Regardless, A fact Marin doesn't really have too much of an issue with, even though he later realized he didn’t really think of himself as a girl, nor did he have any desire to actually be female despite enjoying acting and dressing as such.

However, when Marin was scouted out after winning a local competition in his early teens, it quickly spiraled into him getting his own music career and going by the name Marina the whole time.  He decided it would be best to keep his real gender secret, and has continued success in fields of acting, singing, and often making public appearances as an image girl.  He’s since moved out to Ruby city partly because of a desire for a change of scenery, His powers awakened when he was 15, but is largely unknown by the general public.

Superhuman Information

Power Holder?: Yes

Siren’s Song: Marin’s power is the ability to inspire attraction in those he touches. Essentially, anyone he makes direct contact with (skin to skin, specifically) becomes attracted to him, or even lustful towards him (at the discretion of the other writer)  at present this power only works on a single person and lasts for one post after contact has stopped.  Additionally, this is not a controlled power and is in fact always on in essence.  Marin cannot deactivate it or it’s effects, except by either waiting them out, or shifting them onto a different individual. Similarly, he isn’t really able to control people with it, an effected person still has their free will, and can actively resist the ability if they are aware of it.


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Post by V.Carnage on Wed Dec 19, 2018 9:42 pm

So looks like we are already getting yet another trap! Though this one isn't transgender it seems.  
Personality looks good.  Background is fine overall.  However, could you reword the 3rd sentence in the Background? It's pretty hard to follow.  And while you are doing that, just because of my OCD, if you could add the line space between the Personality and Likes sections and the Dislikes and Background sections, that would be great.  

Power Breakdown:

Pros:
Mind Control Type: Attraction (2 Major)
Lasts 1 post after contact (Minor)

Cons:
Requires Skin to Skin contact (Major)
Cannot Deactivate (Major)
Effect fades if effecting another target (Minor)

Seems to be relatively balanced, for a Mind Control power.  Keep in mind for narrative and PvP purposes we have to severely limit the capabilities of Mind Control powers. For that reason while they may appear weak if we give too much leeway they will quickly spiral out of control.  That being said, based on what you've put that does not seem to be an issue.  
With that being said, just address the minor issues mentioned up at the top and you're golden.
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Post by SirenSong on Wed Dec 19, 2018 10:01 pm

Fixed it.

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Post by V.Carnage on Wed Dec 19, 2018 10:15 pm

Alright, looks like you are

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