Grading Request: Eat the Rich

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Grading Request: Eat the Rich

Post by Equilibrium on Wed Sep 14, 2016 10:01 pm

Thread to be graded:
http://evolutioncity.forumotion.com/t142-eat-the-rich#1513

People to be graded:
Yin and Yang Equilan
Diamante Spada

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Re: Grading Request: Eat the Rich

Post by V.Carnage on Sat Sep 17, 2016 1:07 am

Mmkay, sorry for the wait, but here I am.  So Dia going for point 2 and the twins going for point 1.  Fairly short length.  Some use of the twins powers and Dia's passive power stopping them.  Not really any combat.  

Yin and Yang: Point
Dia: Point

So for Dia, this was a pretty good thread for character development.  She blocked some energy blasts from a pair of bullies, which was probably a pretty stressful situation.  This stuff combined with the fact that this is only your second point means you are good to go here.  In the future, however, I would like to see more from what Dia can do.  You may add some new upgrade that will help with this, but basically just taking hits from now on isn't going to get you too far in the way of points.  It is technically possible, just much more difficult.  As for the twins, there was just a bit of usage of their power.  It wasn't too diverse and they weren't taking it too seriously (not a requirement but it just makes it seem more passive).  The fact that this was their first point basically secured the point because there was some form of usage of their power.  I'd recommend in the future you diversify the way that they use their power to both make things easier for them to get points and to make the story a more interesting read.
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Re: Grading Request: Eat the Rich

Post by Equilibrium on Sat Sep 17, 2016 1:16 am

Secret Detection: The twin's ability to share their minds with one another expands /slightly/ to allow them to detect a hint of the secrets of those around them, but not any concrete information (i.e. if they are near someone that is cheating on their significant other, they can only detect that they are keeping a secret from the person they claim to love). This ability will not get stronger with the addition of future points and cannot be upgraded in any way in the future.

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Re: Grading Request: Eat the Rich

Post by Phalanx on Sat Sep 17, 2016 1:44 am

This point will be used on simply removing Dia's speed restriction so that she can move like a normal human being.
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Re: Grading Request: Eat the Rich

Post by V.Carnage on Sat Sep 17, 2016 1:45 am

Both approved. Go ahead and add them to your plotters.
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